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Tuesday, May 22, 2012

Awaiting Salvation


AWAITING SALVATION

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The deep resonance of your voice
Stirs my broken soul
My heart overjoyed
As I listen to your words…
When you whisper
“I love you baby”
I imagine me in your arms
And remember those moments
That stays buried in me,
Us in our make belief world…
My entrapped soul struggles
To fly and live those lost dreams
It forgets…
Us, no longer exist
We are now travellers
Paving our own destiny
Two separate entities
Two unlike destination…
I chastise my ever hopeful heart
For dreams that are not mine
Wishing sometimes I could
Rip it out…
My desire and longing for you
Burn like ember in the
Darkness of my mind
And I wait for it to die…
For loving you like I do
Has withered the petals
Of my very being
Torn and broken
It awaits another rebirth,
Another salvation…
But for now it lays
Amidst carcasses of questions
That remain dead and silent.

56 comments:

  1. AS always in life someone will come and be your salvation!! I really great touching poem... Your amazing!!

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    1. Thank you Jim. I have found my salvation in me. This was one of my earlier darker poems

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  2. Poignant, Rimly....It made me sad. But as always, beautifully crafted! ♥

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    1. Corinne, this was an old poem of mine. Thank you so much for reading and commenting

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  3. Very soulful and touching! The images of burning embers and withering petals are very powerful and gripping.
    -Portia

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  4. Soulful and beautiful as always Rimly! Great one!

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  5. the pain in this is palpable. There's nothing like a broken heart.

    Hope you've mended, healed and gone on.

    Nice write.

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    1. Yes I have Myrna. My last poem, "My Salvation" was an expression of that. Thank you

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  6. Words that enkindle every soul that stumbles onto your blog….
    Keep them churning … Take care

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    1. Thank you Vijay for you lovely comment

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  7. Hmmm...it's the 'waiting' that could be very tiring...but it's always worth it.

    I could feel every word of this poem ~ how true it is for me...right now, I'm confused with what i truly want...

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    1. Oh my sou sis I hope you find your way. It was very tiring for me too but I am so much better. This was written quite sometime ago

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  8. Sad emotions buried from deep within poured out into a beautifully written poem. <3 <3 <3 :-)

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  9. You're telling something very sad, but in such a beautiful way!

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  10. I'd forgotten how gut wrenchingly good your poetry is! Enjoyed reading it...fantastic work Rimly!

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    1. Swati missed you and your wonderful comments on my poems. Welcome back my friend

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  11. You, my dear, are the Queen of desire. You are fearless when it comes to peeling back the layers of past hurts and heartache and articulating passionate words. I get chills reading your words.

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    1. Brenda, coming from a talented writer like you who is equally fearless about peeling the layers is a great compliment. Thank you so much

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  12. A fitting title for this kind of inner struggle to find oneness with another who eludes, who escapes your embrace and goes a separate way. Rimly, keep weaving these words into mosaics of beauty. Unrequited love can make or break a soul. Sublimate, that’s what you do best my friend.

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    1. Debra thank you so much for your compliment. I don't know if I really do sublimate but I try and express myself to the best of my ability

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  13. RImly, it's a sad thing trying to teach the heart to let go of something that it believes it needs. One can feel the roots being pulled—that tug of surrender that hurts more than death.
    This is beautiful. I felt every bit of it. <3

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    1. I agree Leah, surrender can really be like your roots being pulled out. It hurts more than death because what you give up is what you know sustained you. Thank you so much

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  14. My dearest Rimly,
    Sometimes the sadness in sorrow can be much sweeter than having a lover who is never really there or whom you can never trust. In dreams we can always love and be loved by anyone of our choice (smile). Very well written my dear and yes, full of emotions. I LOVED it!!

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    1. Yes I agree with you Andy. Thank you so much

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  15. So heart-wrenching and moving, Rimly. Your poetry lifts me to another plain where I feel your spirit and presence. You speak to my heart!
    Blessings!

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    1. When a poet touches a reader's heart then she or he has succeeded in achieving the right response through her or his poetry. I am truly honored to know that my poetry does that to you. Thank you my friend

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  16. Us in our make believe world...a world that exists only for us, deep within...superb! Rimly.

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  17. My dear Rimly,
    I responded to your work yesterday, but not sure why it did not show up??? In any case, your poem is full of deep emotions and sadness. I enjoy writing about love when there is a touch of sorrow to flavor its meaning. I loved the ending for it went straight to my heart!!! Thanks for sharing my friend.

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    1. I know what you mean Andy. "Our sweetest songs are those that tell us of saddest thoughts" My favorite line

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  18. This must be my poetry day. What a feast. Thank you.

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  19. Your words feel as though they are from deep down in your heart. It brings a tear to my eye to read. Everyone waits until they find their salvation, the love in their life. The one that we long to hear only a few words spoken. This was beautiful Rimly. I enjoyed reading ☺

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    1. Thank you so much Mary. Really feels nice to come and see your comment. xoxo

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  20. "For loving you like I do
    Has withered the petals
    Of my very being"- that was painfully beautiful.
    good to read in the comments that it was your earlier ones, and now you've transcended it :)

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    1. Ha,ha,ha,! Mohit , yes I have transcended. I have changed a lot since then. Thank you for always encouraging me to be always positive.

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  21. Ah, Rimly, how does one tell the heart that it's not to be? Surely unrequited love is heartbreaking. Yet, it is in telling of what the heart speaks that we're able to make it all out. We're able to ponder, question, and ultimately, let go. Your words, as always, make me sigh deeply. Beautiful, my friend. :)

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  22. My daughter tells me all the time, "When you look for something you never find it. Don't look. When you're not looking, whatever it is you want and need will find you. It arrives without notice or an invitation.

    As Jim said, one will come along.

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    1. Your daughter is a wise like my son Ron. He tells me the same thing always. Thank you Brenda. I hope one will come along.

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  23. WOW! Very powerful words! I could feel this deeply! BEAUTIFUL Rimly!!!

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    1. Thank you Lisa. Glad to know this poem touched you

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  24. beautiful, poignant yet melancholic... a very beautiful work

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  25. I read this one again, again and again. Allowing every word to be soaked in. In all the pain and angst, your bring hope. You rekindle the faith in salvation. Thanks Rimly.

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