AWAITING SALVATION
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The deep resonance of
your voice
Stirs my broken soul
My heart overjoyed
As I listen to your
words…
When you whisper
“I love you baby”
I imagine me in your
arms
And remember those
moments
That stays buried in
me,
Us in our make belief
world…
My entrapped soul
struggles
To fly and live those
lost dreams
It forgets…
Us, no longer exist
We are now travellers
Paving our own destiny
Two separate entities
Two unlike
destination…
I chastise my ever
hopeful heart
For dreams that are
not mine
Wishing sometimes I
could
Rip it out…
My desire and longing
for you
Burn like ember in the
Darkness of my mind
And I wait for it to
die…
For loving you like I
do
Has withered the
petals
Of my very being
Torn and broken
It awaits another
rebirth,
Another salvation…
But for now it lays
Amidst carcasses of
questions
That remain dead and
silent.
AS always in life someone will come and be your salvation!! I really great touching poem... Your amazing!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jim. I have found my salvation in me. This was one of my earlier darker poems
DeletePoignant, Rimly....It made me sad. But as always, beautifully crafted! ♥
ReplyDeleteCorinne, this was an old poem of mine. Thank you so much for reading and commenting
DeleteVery soulful and touching! The images of burning embers and withering petals are very powerful and gripping.
ReplyDelete-Portia
Thank you Portia
DeleteSoulful and beautiful as always Rimly! Great one!
ReplyDeleteThank you Kriti
Deletethe pain in this is palpable. There's nothing like a broken heart.
ReplyDeleteHope you've mended, healed and gone on.
Nice write.
Yes I have Myrna. My last poem, "My Salvation" was an expression of that. Thank you
DeleteWords that enkindle every soul that stumbles onto your blog….
ReplyDeleteKeep them churning … Take care
Thank you Vijay for you lovely comment
DeleteHmmm...it's the 'waiting' that could be very tiring...but it's always worth it.
ReplyDeleteI could feel every word of this poem ~ how true it is for me...right now, I'm confused with what i truly want...
Oh my sou sis I hope you find your way. It was very tiring for me too but I am so much better. This was written quite sometime ago
DeleteSad emotions buried from deep within poured out into a beautifully written poem. <3 <3 <3 :-)
ReplyDeleteThank you my sweet Irene <3<3<3
DeleteYou're telling something very sad, but in such a beautiful way!
ReplyDeleteThank you Nikky
DeleteI'd forgotten how gut wrenchingly good your poetry is! Enjoyed reading it...fantastic work Rimly!
ReplyDeleteSwati missed you and your wonderful comments on my poems. Welcome back my friend
DeleteYou, my dear, are the Queen of desire. You are fearless when it comes to peeling back the layers of past hurts and heartache and articulating passionate words. I get chills reading your words.
ReplyDeleteBrenda, coming from a talented writer like you who is equally fearless about peeling the layers is a great compliment. Thank you so much
DeleteA fitting title for this kind of inner struggle to find oneness with another who eludes, who escapes your embrace and goes a separate way. Rimly, keep weaving these words into mosaics of beauty. Unrequited love can make or break a soul. Sublimate, that’s what you do best my friend.
ReplyDeleteDebra thank you so much for your compliment. I don't know if I really do sublimate but I try and express myself to the best of my ability
DeleteRImly, it's a sad thing trying to teach the heart to let go of something that it believes it needs. One can feel the roots being pulled—that tug of surrender that hurts more than death.
ReplyDeleteThis is beautiful. I felt every bit of it. <3
I agree Leah, surrender can really be like your roots being pulled out. It hurts more than death because what you give up is what you know sustained you. Thank you so much
DeleteWow...very deep. Loved it!
ReplyDeleteThank you Jessica
DeleteMy dearest Rimly,
ReplyDeleteSometimes the sadness in sorrow can be much sweeter than having a lover who is never really there or whom you can never trust. In dreams we can always love and be loved by anyone of our choice (smile). Very well written my dear and yes, full of emotions. I LOVED it!!
Yes I agree with you Andy. Thank you so much
DeleteSo heart-wrenching and moving, Rimly. Your poetry lifts me to another plain where I feel your spirit and presence. You speak to my heart!
ReplyDeleteBlessings!
When a poet touches a reader's heart then she or he has succeeded in achieving the right response through her or his poetry. I am truly honored to know that my poetry does that to you. Thank you my friend
Deleteheartbreaking XOXOXO
ReplyDeleteIt is LInda. Thank you
DeleteUs in our make believe world...a world that exists only for us, deep within...superb! Rimly.
ReplyDeleteThank you Janaki
DeleteMy dear Rimly,
ReplyDeleteI responded to your work yesterday, but not sure why it did not show up??? In any case, your poem is full of deep emotions and sadness. I enjoy writing about love when there is a touch of sorrow to flavor its meaning. I loved the ending for it went straight to my heart!!! Thanks for sharing my friend.
I know what you mean Andy. "Our sweetest songs are those that tell us of saddest thoughts" My favorite line
DeleteThis must be my poetry day. What a feast. Thank you.
ReplyDeleteThank you Galen
DeleteYour words feel as though they are from deep down in your heart. It brings a tear to my eye to read. Everyone waits until they find their salvation, the love in their life. The one that we long to hear only a few words spoken. This was beautiful Rimly. I enjoyed reading ☺
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Mary. Really feels nice to come and see your comment. xoxo
Delete"For loving you like I do
ReplyDeleteHas withered the petals
Of my very being"- that was painfully beautiful.
good to read in the comments that it was your earlier ones, and now you've transcended it :)
Ha,ha,ha,! Mohit , yes I have transcended. I have changed a lot since then. Thank you for always encouraging me to be always positive.
Deletewonderful.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)))
DeleteAh, Rimly, how does one tell the heart that it's not to be? Surely unrequited love is heartbreaking. Yet, it is in telling of what the heart speaks that we're able to make it all out. We're able to ponder, question, and ultimately, let go. Your words, as always, make me sigh deeply. Beautiful, my friend. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you so much Bella
DeleteMy daughter tells me all the time, "When you look for something you never find it. Don't look. When you're not looking, whatever it is you want and need will find you. It arrives without notice or an invitation.
ReplyDeleteAs Jim said, one will come along.
Your daughter is a wise like my son Ron. He tells me the same thing always. Thank you Brenda. I hope one will come along.
DeleteWOW! Very powerful words! I could feel this deeply! BEAUTIFUL Rimly!!!
ReplyDeleteThank you Lisa. Glad to know this poem touched you
Deletebeautiful, poignant yet melancholic... a very beautiful work
ReplyDeleteI read this one again, again and again. Allowing every word to be soaked in. In all the pain and angst, your bring hope. You rekindle the faith in salvation. Thanks Rimly.
ReplyDeleteThank you Fiona. There is always hope.
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